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I want to note the cinematic clarity in the hospital scene, rendered in sensory impressions:
“The rhythmic beep of monitors filled the sterile room, blending with the faint antiseptic smell of alcohol wipes and clean linens…”
Rather than overwhelming the reader with a long description, you've evoked the atmosphere through details that suggest tone and mood, mirroring the stalled life Jake is living.The dialogue with Lily is not long, however, we catch a great piece of their life story. I love the way you work with subtext and convey Jakes emotions without mentioning them:
“His reflection stared back at him, unfamiliar, the tie crooked and the jacket tight across his chest.”
My main genra I write in is Urban Fantasy. I started the series Lila & The Dark (https://a.co/d/4j2EZHQ) Last year and have the sequal out for submission an will hopefull be out soon.
I want to note the cinematic clarity in the hospital scene, rendered in sensory impressions:
“The rhythmic beep of monitors filled the sterile room, blending with the faint antiseptic smell of alcohol wipes and clean linens…”
Rather than overwhelming the reader with a long description, you've evoked the atmosphere through details that suggest tone and mood, mirroring the stalled life Jake is living.The dialogue with Lily is not long, however, we catch a great piece of their life story. I love the way you work with subtext and convey Jakes emotions without mentioning them:
“His reflection stared back at him, unfamiliar, the tie crooked and the jacket tight across his chest.”
My main genra I write in is Urban Fantasy. I started the series Lila & The Dark (https://a.co/d/4j2EZHQ) Last year and have the sequal out for submission an will hopefull be out soon.